fools gold
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a field of holes
the forsaken evidence
of fortune hunters
the forsaken evidence
of fortune hunters
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Re: fools gold
Despoiling fields out of greed ... whether they be real or metaphoric, it happens all too often.
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Re: fools gold
Hi entwife,
Great observation of a frantic time... people dropping everything to go seek their treasures in holes and in the rivers...
This also reminds me of the movie Holes where the villain secretly has teenagers dig holes in hopes to find a treasure, in the guise of teaching them "responsibility".
Nice haiku!
~TIMOTHY~
Great observation of a frantic time... people dropping everything to go seek their treasures in holes and in the rivers...
This also reminds me of the movie Holes where the villain secretly has teenagers dig holes in hopes to find a treasure, in the guise of teaching them "responsibility".
Nice haiku!
~TIMOTHY~
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Re: fools gold
My mind created an almost cartoonish image from your words...then started to acquire grass, and mud, and stuff...I had fun reading this piece...thanks! - Dew
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Re: fools gold
Excellent work, this is a snapshot of time which ponders much thought. I think the term "forsaken" is the pivot of this poem, which reveals the speakers view of things without forcing it upon the reader. It's rather symptomatic of humanity as a whole.
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Re: fools gold
entwife, loved this and a very apt piece to be honored in the spotlight. Congratulations, well deserved.
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Re: fools gold
ruins and destruction left behind by greed, excellent piece. Congrats on the spotlight
Confidence is a state of mind where one is willing to abandon self-preservation in order to achieve their goals
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We're all too obsessed with our own misery and experience that it trumps all others
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All poets are megalomaniacs
We're all too obsessed with our own misery and experience that it trumps all others
The Rebel Theory
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Re: fools gold
I agree! I also enjoyed reading this poem. :)
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Re: fools gold
wow, I'm shocked and honored, thank you all for appreciating this
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Re: fools gold
A great piece my friend.....Congrats on the spotlight......Whisk
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Re: fools gold
Strangely enough, this brought to mind the ruins of great cities that fell due to greed. So many spend their lives searching for that get rich quick scheme or trying to climb so high that they forget the things that are most important. Gold cannot fill the holes left wanting in a person's life. Great Spotlight and congrats!
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Re: fools gold
entwife~I can only concur with what has already been said about this remarkable piece by your pen and add my Congratulation's on the Spotlight! Musie