The lie that killed me

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scottguy
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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by scottguy » April 20th, 2014, 6:50 pm

Thank you all so much!!I am absolutely honored to have my work featured in TPS Spotlight!



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AnIdeasman
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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by AnIdeasman » April 20th, 2014, 7:20 pm

This is really well crafted! each stanza holds the superb rise and fall unique to structured verse. The rhythm of this piece carried me through with ease. The tale itself is also a notable element. Well done and well written



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tangerinepie
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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by tangerinepie » April 21st, 2014, 12:28 pm

Suspenseful and gripping, with superb formatting that made it easy to read.A dark write that brings the unexpected conclusion to it even more shocking.Congrats on a brilliant spotlight choice..Tangie..


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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by dornicks » April 21st, 2014, 3:45 pm

A clever and skilled piece ,deserving of the spotlight. Congratulations,

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LorettaYoung
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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by LorettaYoung » April 22nd, 2014, 11:50 am

Absolutely awesome in every way; style, technique, rhythm and intensely profound. What a great read and thanks.



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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by Philip16 » April 23rd, 2014, 1:19 pm

I think your poem really resonates with what some would call the
hero's journey. Something dies, something is sacrificed, in order
for the hero or humanity to reach a higher level of awareness. I
found your poem very appealing and thank you for sharing this.
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dwells
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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by dwells » April 26th, 2014, 8:53 am

Multiple personalities and guessing the real you lies somewhere in-between maybe SG? A well-deserved Spotlight and strong message, "to thine own self be true..." - cheers!


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Re: The lie that killed me

Post by garic » April 26th, 2014, 9:54 am

Dramatic piece! That great ending made me take another look at my own "multiple personalities" :0)



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