The Chalice

[SirFleshwound]

Primordial sediments boil and brew
A broth elemental of hearty blend
Her alchemy shapes my hope anew
Divine the wine of hope ascends

Before creations wind subsides
Before embers of corruptive flame
My privilege to have shared this ride
Fuels desire to drink life..ne’er to abstain

[Dew]

Incredible language and most pleasing in it's simple form...a gem for sure. Bravo! - Dew

[moe]

Well writ you have captured the olde language and done a well written piece with it Well Done!

[musie]

I have to agree with Dew....this is indeed a gem from your pen...Absolutely loved the 2nd vs. of this piece....leaves the reader with a great sense of emotional intrigue and a sense of joy that you took us on the ride with you.....Musie

[SirFleshwound]

Well, I must thank you all for joining me on the ride:) I eagerly await the next chapters!

[Royston Vasey]

Hi SirFlwshwound,

A nice ode with an interesting alternate (aka 'cross') rhyme scheme. Were I in a pernickety mood, which I suppose I must be, then I'd wonder at your piece's lack of punctuation.

Thanks for the read.


Go well.

[Morning Star]

Wonderful poem. Its like a prayer or a spell.

Anyway beautiful wording and I especially liked the last line of your poem.

Thanks for sharing.

[tangerinepie]

Sir M..I hope you drop by to see this charming poem spot lighted.Next chapters would be anticipated with delight..Your style is unique..Congrats..Tangie..

[candlewitch]

hello SirF,

Before creations wind subsides
Before embers of corruptive flame
My privilege to have shared this ride
Fuels desire to drink life..ne’er to abstain

wonderful writing with fantastic language usage! Congratulations on SpotLight!
always, Cat

[dwells]

SFW this was one to remember and she must definitely be something special so strike while the iron is hot perhaps! Before those creative winds subside and you become becalmed and adrift, cheers!

[AnIdeasman]

Brilliant as always, my friend.

[songofmeadow]

The language gave the feel of an incantation which added to the atmosphere, congrats on the spotlight mx

[rupertpupkin]

Hi. I remember reading and enjoying this one so much. I was so glad to get the chance to enjoy it once more. A great write and very deserving of a spotlight, well done, Sean.

[everhopeful]

The central image of this one is excellent, slightly reminiscent of the Anacreontic form to me, which is always a plus. With your very smart use of vocabulary this relatively short poem feels like it carries the weight of far, far more, and it made me feel like drinking from that cup of life myself!
Congratulations on the spotlight!

[SirFleshwound]

Surprised and humbled to say the least. I'm quite sentimental about this one.

[garic]

Transported me - felt more like waching a movie than reading a poem - I was there watching an ancient being's blessing descend ...

[Josie]

I was caught in the web of your words with 'boil, brew, broth, and blend' with 'before' echoing 'beginning'. Thank you for the delightful ride. Congrats on the TPS Spotlight.