Dark Venus.

[Pride Ed]

Dark Venus.
By A.A.J.B.

Scarlet lips done in roses. She kisses
the sun goodnight, leaving crimson
smears on the horizon.

She ties black orchids to her ebony
curls; copper-colored hands weaving
redolence into midnight gold.

The night holds her close. She caresses
the leaves and play in
shadows that move like smoke.

Her amber eyes catch moonlight like
glowing drops of honey. The tears from her
eyes always the sweetest.

Operatic tones held in drifting
petals; zephyr notes from her
soothing voice played by trees.

The sun lights a bonfire on the horizon;
she gently kisses the embers
and recedes like the tides.

Fire drains into blue light.
Orange seeds dot the sky. They look
on and see him kiss her in the morning.

[Liquid Bear]

Wow... I'm mesmerized! Colorful yet dark, somber yet erotic in a mysterious way... You seem to possess quite a gift for visual language. This is my favorite stanza:

"Operatic tones held in drifting
petals; zephyr notes from her
soothing voice played by trees."

Perfect use of synesthesia. Mad props for this one!

Bear.

[Pride Ed]

Wow! Thank you so much!
I actually struggled with getting that part of the poem right.

[TheDamsel]

Colorful piece and with good imagery! beautiful poem! And I like the title!

[Pride Ed]

Thanks so much!!

[up2quark]

Your imagery really captured the dark essence of a Venus, personal or metaphorical or astronomical. It was a well developed flow of words that brought forth a form of clarity to your view of your projection, it really resembled a delicate thought and imagery process! Good imagination sir!

[Pride Ed]

Wow! Thank you very much!
I'm really happy I revised this poem, even though it took like 9 years.
XDDD

I'm pleased everyone likes the finished piece so much.
^_^

[tangerinepie]

I was captivated by the imagery, it took my breath away and the whole piece just sang with marvelous word play.A very memorable read..Tangie..

[Pride Ed]

Thank you very much, Tangie!!
^_^

[moe]

I'm jealous...!

[Pride Ed]

@Moe:
lol. I've seen your work.
I'm the one that should be jealous!
;D

Thanks for reading.

[VeiledPrincess]

Lovely and slightly sexy poem filled tenderness and awe.
Well done Pride Ed.

[Pride Ed]

Thanks so much, VeiledPrincess!
:33

[konch]

Very goth. To be read to the music of Portishead. :)

[Pride Ed]

lol. I'm listening to "To Kill A Dead Man" right now! XD
Thanks for reading!!
:D

[CarolynKleefeld]

Truly exquisite imagery, sensuously dark, magical and enchanted, elegantly and masterfully composed; absolutely delightful!

[Pride Ed]

Thanks so much, CarolynKleefeld!

[konch]

Wish there were TPS awards for intuition in commenting.

Re "To Kill A Dead Man", never knew about that, thanks! Reminded me a bit plotwise of the later (and very different genre) Ramona Falls "I Say Fever" music video, which I think is also a fun watch.

[Pride Ed]

Thank you very much!!
^_^

[Pride Ed]

Aww! Thanks!
And welcome to TPS.
^_^